Your general subject: *
In Broader View: Biology
In Combination Point of View: Biosciences + Biotech + Business + Ethics + Legal
Focused Major: Entrepreneurial Biotechnology
Your specific topic: *
Life Changing Event that shaped my new Career (Graduate School Essay)
Type of document: *
Essay: Personal Statement (For Graduate School)
Descriptive and Detailed Hints for Personal Statement: *
I thought that the following points could be helpful for the best written personal statement for graduate school (the points should show the courage, hope and strength rather than sadness to maintain the positive, non – boring and impressive attitude of the reader).
As I want to apply for Entrepreneurial Biotechnology program with more bioscience and business, and part ethical and legal focus of the technology. Therefore I would like to keep more biosciences domain towards newer paradigms of the related technologies to solve the current day health issues with a touch of new businesses / Ideas. Of course the business side adds up strategy, finance and insight to the new technology and legal and ethical sides would allow the proper usage after passing through certain measures.
“Someone very close to me passed away with ovarian cancer and during her illness and afterwards even I lived couple of years of my life in darkness. She was diagnosed for cancer when it was at third stage. It changed my life by all means or to be truer on all aspects of life, whether it’s social, moral or something else. Hence, it also impacted my career not only in those days but afterwards as well. As I wanted to have a degree in business / Finance etc. but after this incident, I decided to have a degree in biosciences so I finally graduated with a degree in “Bioinformatics and Computational Biology””
I would like to show that if one feels the pain then one can stand up for a change. I would like to show my eligibility and interest in the related field through my personal statement and with some impressive ending paragraph.
In my essay I would like to show that there biomedical issues and how the current day technology could help, provided if directed in the proper direction through proper planning and also to the areas where it is least available. Above all this, my real life incident has made me to think about these issues and constantly forcing me to adopt the career in biosciences / biotech / pharmaceuticals, in order to prevent those painful diseases from happening or at least their early diagnostics at a controllable stage.
In addition to my desired career plan, I have mentioned few of the points, just to give a little back ground about my life incident and how it affected me and my career goal. Rest is up to the writer of the personal statement that how he/she adds up other factors / flavors for the “Graduate level Personal Statement” for the prestigious schools.
The points I mentioned are scattered all over, but i am hopeful that the writer would understand my point of view and would produce a best piece for me (as i am already getting late for my deadline).
Quotations I would like to use: *
I have couple of quotation which I really liked in my recent readings. If possible and make sense then please use them with a flavor of above details. Only one or two quotations at most I would like to use in my statement. Usually an opening paragraph starting with the quotation following the background of life changing event would make my vision, but again it is a suggestion. The writer might like to fit these points in the overall flow of the essay.
1) Greatness is always built on this foundation: The ability to appear, speak and act, as the most common man.
2) There is a candle in your heart, ready to be kindled. There is a void in your soul, ready to be filled. You feel it, don’t you?
3) Not hammer-strokes, but dance of the water sings the pebbles into perfection.
4) If you think you are too small to make a difference, try sleeping in a closed room with a mosquito.
Couple of Suggestion in my knowledge just to make myself “Calm”:
A good personal statement balances a discussion of your past experience with an explanation of your goals, plans, and aspirations. Do not write an essay entirely about what you plan to do, but do not ignore your plans either. If possible, show the continuity between your past experience and your future plans.
Keep in mind the purpose of your essay. Remember that the other parts of your application will tell the review committee about your schoolwork, your extra-curricular activities, and your intellectual ability. You do not need to repeat things listed elsewhere on the application. Nor do you need to try to prove that you are smart. You should have two goals: first, to show that you can communicate clearly and easily; and second, to convey a sense of who you are within the parameters of the questions asked.
Non Related Stuff:
Oh Yeah, One more thing. It might not be related to the statement but just for the sake of information, as it might help writer to use the sentences confidently. I have worked in databases with couple of financial clients and have been on deans list at my undergraduate studies.