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Next Depression essay. If you have idea good. If not you can write about Depressionand Family, health, correlation between Depression and disease. You need include quotes (2) and outline
ORGANIZATION AND OUTLINING
An outline just helps you organize your research, the way empty drawers would help you do housework. It should be more like a Matryoshka doll than a grocery list. However you make the outline logical by using complex, compound sentences as often as possible. The outline is an organization of the topic paragraphs, with the thesis refined and developed in I, II, III, IV, and V. For example:
I. Introduction: State thesis as a complex, compound sentence
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II. Claim of Fact–Restate thesis around major problem.
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B. Counterclaim to your claim of fact
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III. Claim of Value–Refine thesis in terms of values, what certain groups of people, religion, culture deem better or worse.
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B. One or more counterclaims to your claim of value.
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IV. Claim of policy– Develop thesis in terms of potential solutions to your problem.
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B. Counterclaim(s) to your policy claim. For example, I may present a therapeutic model to solve back pain, and the counterclaims might be what other therapists do in their rehab centers.1)
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V. Conclusion
A. Summarizing and evaluating your evidence.
B. Identifying unsolved problems and giving suggestions for future research.
Note that this model is rather rigid, and therefore should not be a writing model. You should write as creatively as possible, but you need some kind of structure that organizes your data and develops your argumentation. As you gather more information, you will then be able to evaluate it in terms of the thesis you are developing.
Comments to all your essay from my prof. ))))(Your outline is a grocery list?it should be a jigsaw puzzle connected with claims and counterclaims articulated as complex, compound sentences. Be specific about the time, place, and people in your claim of fact and then open up for more literary analysis for values. You are doing better with quotes?I love Baudrillard and the Russian writers but apply them to your patients. You have some ESL and grammatical errors. You need a stronger organization where claims progress logically around YOUR thesis and you come up with a multi-pronged plan to treat the specific patients you described in your claim of fact. You have a lot of research but argumentation, style, and originality are weak.
For your project you must use at least 6 literary quotes for claims of value. Your Outline needs work in terms of linguistic logic. Your research is great but you need to work on style and flow. 23 and a half hours in course.)